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A lot of description for Donny, and he muses a bit. I'd rather have seen the huge web between the three of them in a less direct way. It was ...

Since I'm dead, the only worse thing could be that she's still alive... --Captain Aloisio (so vague..) Who do you put complete trust in?

I'm in a colorguard, so I do dance and flag twirling. Yes, I'm a dancer, but not exactly the clean type =]

In my opinion, you should be able to add "ish" to the end of any word. Examples: I'll meet you around one-ish. Her hair was blonde-ish red. (It's different than ...

Ah, the Ditzy Critique. Every time I get one of those, I die a bit inside.

Sarcasm, as in cynicism, Snoink?

The storm is wicked. Half-drenched in underage champagne, I stare as God’s woody fingers swirl and spin in a world of majestic half-truths. Full-blown masts sweep me away, a magic ...

I'm enjoying this...

Romancing sand-dancer, I’m on the pirate shore, hand in hand fate and infatuation. Your love burns in the residue of rainwater, of the isle storms and looming letters. They all ...

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Hm. It seems we have somebody new on the block, and with a style all too similar to mine. =] I'm complimented. Fresh challenge. :D Punctuation suggestions: I can hear ...

I liked how "fly" and "sky" rhymed an all. Gave it another layer. I back Cassandra's question - does clouds have to be capatalized?

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I might completely delete this. We'll see. Margaritaville The room was dense, heavy with the smoke of lust and heated, like a sinful calm. Two crimson high-heels were crossed one ...

*gets angry* you didnt tear it apart, Snoink! in any case, the part is increasingly dirty.